Check meines englischen Anschreibens für die Beratung
Hallo zusammen,
ich habe im Juli meinen Abschluss gemacht und bin seit einiger Zeit schon am Bewerbungen schreiben. Es läuft solala, bei einer Big4 war ich in der letzten Auswahlstufe, letztlich hatte sich allerdings Informatiker durchgesetzt und die Stelle im ERP bekommen.
Sobald ich zu einem Gespräch eingeladen werde, komme ich häufig auch in die nächste Runde. Allerdings glaube ich, dass mein Anschreiben noch verbesserungswürdig ist. Über jeden Ratschlag und Verbesserungsvorschlag bin ich dankbar.
Paar Daten und Fakten zu mir:
- Bachelor in Int. Management mit 1,8
- Thesis über Blockchain in der Logistik mit 1,3
- 2 Praktika während des Studiums (Supply Chain bei einem Autobauer, Sales/Marketing bei einer Airline im Ausland)
- Auslandssemester in Mexiko (Note: 1,2)
- Sprachen: Englisch fließend, Spanisch konversationssicher
- Vor meinem Studium Ausbildung als Logistikkaufmann (Note: 1,6) bei einer großen dt. Spedition, anschl. 6 Monate festangestellt im Vertrieb gearbeitet mit eigenem Kundenstamm und Ergebnisverantwortung
Ich bin mir sicher, dass ich als Bachelorabsolvent über die nötige Berufs- und Auslandserfahrung verfüge. Wichtig ist mir jetzt, praktische Erfahrungen zu sammeln und endlich "loszulegen", vorzugsweise natürlich in einer Beratungsposition, gerne Fokus auf Logistik bzw. Digitalisierung. Mein Lebenslauf sollte soweit okay sein, allerdings vermute ich, dass meine bisherigen Absagen in meinem Cover Letter begründet sind.
Hier eine Version meiner Anschreiben:
Dear Ms. XX,
Passion and performance are my personal values, which I also associate with XXX and which I pursue in my career. XXX excels in Advisory to the greatest extent, which influences my wish to become part of the Management Consulting team. Through the combination of both, my passion for business management and the diverse fields XXX has to offer, namely XXX, XXX and XXX, it is my desire to begin my professional career in this entry-level Consulting position starting XXX in XXX.
In each of my professional working experiences, I managed a strategic project. Having worked in Logistics, Controlling, Marketing and Sales provided me with valuable insights and the understanding of how an international corporation works internally and how it interacts with stakeholders. A brief overview: During my internship in Supply Chain Management at XXX, I led a project team with the purpose of examining the global sourcing strategy to identify cost reduction opportunities. We developed new processes to save XX% network costs as well a reduction of XX% of carbon emissions for components that are produced in XXX and delivered to the production plant in XXX. My work included gathering and analyzing data, doing business case calculations and presenting the results to higher management. Along with proving my analytical skills, I was also successful in ensuring the implementation of the new process for March 2019.
Having lived in four different countries, I am a person unrestricted by geographic boundaries. Owing to my international experience as a student in Germany, Mexico and Spain and an employee in Germany and Canada, I experienced International Business to the fullest. I embrace the possibility of getting to know additional cultures and different ways of doing business, but I am also aware of today’s changes in global industries. For example, in my Bachelor thesis I researched the potential of the Blockchain technology for companies and studied several logistics and trade finance use cases.
The thesis has not only raised my awareness of the technologies’ potential, but also made me aware of some severe challenges industries are facing right now due to insufficient digitalized business processes. The more important it is now to accompany companies successfully through the digital transformation and support them to overcome this process and remain competitive. I am certain that my combination of business skills and intercultural knowledge will benefit the success of your customers.
Concluding, I wish to join XXX because I believe the company will provide me with ideal conditions to begin my professional career. Furthermore, I am certain that the company will develop skills I am passionate about while networking with people who have similar goals. My international experience and analytical skills provide me with tools to contribute significantly to the success of the companies’ customers. I am looking forward to meeting you personally and to convince you of my qualifications for this position.
Vielen Dank für eure Rückmeldung :)
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